A fun ride | Script Revolution

A fun ride

Script: 
What I Loved: 

Very cute indeed. This might even work well for a commercial of some sort, maybe a jewelry or keepsake type product. I really loved the trick of grandma psyching him out. Didn't see it coming. Not easy to get that nuance between comedy, thrill and drama but you've managed to nail it.

What I'd Love To See: 

I think this one is just fine. I would say if you go a tad longer you could go into their relationship and how strong of a bond they have and why. Could be a nice thread leading to the hospital. Maybe even a grandma/grandpa flashback. All extra though. It was a cool little short.

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