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Nice work!

What I Loved: 

This has a playful feel even though it's dark. Nice threading. That's hard to achieve but the temperament and tone of the two characters is dead on. I could imagine a Doc Martin quirkiness to this and that working quite well. The build is there and I like the end as well.

What I'd Love To See: 

I would say cut the actual burying of the body. Have Karen working it out as Lilly is yelling and yelling and in her face and then poof... she's at the ceremony winning or whatever and there's a shovel stuck in the ground right where she's buried. Or something... I like the idea of it just cutting to her amazing garden. Letting the viewer/reader stitch it together is always a nice touch. Overall a fun read.

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