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Plenty of Twists and Turns

What I Loved: 

The story was surprising as I expected a lone gunman at first, then producers having men on ground to make survival harder but it was different. There's plenty of tension when each new character is introduced and with the cuts to Etheridge. The premise is solid with five strangers going on a TV show in a remote island to survive.

What I'd Love To See: 

Some of the dialogue seems on the nose particular Pierre like the bit on pg.5- hey Polly! it might be... On the same page I'm unsure how we get to 'I hope he's okay' to using camera. Maybe describe characters more physically when introduced than just their age and give more traits when talking.


Dale Swaby's picture

Thanks David for the reading, and review. All noted.