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Joseph Bianco's picture
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Logline Critique Requested on a HOT button topic

So it was mentioned that I might want to change my new script to not contain the hot button topics associated with it.

What say you?

A Lab-techs friends battle the dead, soldiers and mercenaries trying to save him from his captors after he foiled a plot to steal the serum his team developed to reverse DNA damage caused by COVID-19.

Or

A lab-tech’s held hostage and tortured after destroying the serum his team developed to reverse DNA damage done by COVID-19 that the military was plotting to acquire. His friends battle the dead, the military and mercenaries attempting to save him and Hollywood.

Lance West's picture
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Too soon?

If it was me, I would replace "COVID-19" with "A DEADLY VIRUS".

But, and there's always a but, if it's integral to your story go for it.

Hope that helps.

Julian Martin's picture
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I've heard a lot of Twitter chatter about agents automatically turning down anything COVID related but it's inevitable that there will be movies about it in time. I agree with Lance. You don't have to call it COVID for it to be about COVID. 

Joseph Bianco's picture
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Thanks. It's been reworked, now editing. This is where it is at the moment.

When his old friend is kidnapped after discovering the secret to reanimating the dead, an ex-cop battles blood-suckers, the military, assorted zombies, and soldiers of fortune attempting to rescue him and save the world.

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