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Julian Martin's picture
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What do you think of my ScriptHop packet? (comedy)

ScriptHop's free review of my comedy script's packet really clarified my understanding of how to make a proper one.  

Would anyone mind checking out my packet and telling me how they like it?

https://packet.scripthop.com/julian_martin_poppycock

CJ Walley's picture
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Nice job man. Love the casting.

Julian Martin's picture
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Thanks, CJ! Reeeeeaally want Kristin Wiig for my Harpoesque character. 

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She's awesome. Fingers crossed for you. 

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That's pretty nifty! Kristin Wiig would be great!

Julian Martin's picture
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Thanks! Yeah, Kristen is just the f'ing queen of comedy. What she could do with her facial expressions would rival Harpo Marx. 

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Thanks for posting this, I really enjoyed it! The dialogue is so colorful and spirited. Very original and love the madcap plot. 

Brings to mind The Night Life of the Gods by Thorne Smith, written in the early 30s. Smith also wrote Topper, which spawned a successful TV series, and I Married a Witch (said to be the inspiration for Bewitched though uncredited). An inventor with a crazy ray machine brings to life Greek statues in a NY art museum and they go on a drunken, hedonistic rampage in the city. 

Anyway this has a great vibe and you offer a lot to enjoy in the packet. It's inspiring, good luck with it!

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Thank you Kaye for your incredibly encouraging words! Every review I've received so far says Poppycock is unique, fun, and remarkably funny. I'm hoping that writing a genuinely funny comedy will get me somewhere. 
 

I see that The Night Life of the Gods is on YouTube, I shall have to explore. Thank you for that deep cut!

Julian Martin's picture
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Whoops can't delete that double-post so...anyone know any diehard Marx Brothers fans in Hollywood? Rob Zombie? Producers? Appreciate it:)

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Amy Heckerling, Judd Apatow, Danny DeVito, Alice Cooper, Gilbert Gottfried, Salvador Dali.