I've Got Your Number by Gene Gwynne | Script Revolution

I've Got Your Number

Los Angeles, 1947 A private detective meets with all the suspects of a blackmail scheme - and suffers the consequences.

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1940s film noir satire, as hard-boiled, cynical private detective Vic Winslow wallows within the gritty, sordid, sleazy world of blackmail, murder, corruption, mobsters, pure evil, and a femme fatale.

This short satire contains all the elements contained within the film noir genre of its era, in the voice and style of Raymond Chandler. A dark, gritty tale of hard-hearted, pessimistic fatalism that transcends and transforms the characters toward a resumption of heart and hope.

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This is the type of short that tells a very character driven story. I love these type of intimate, personal stories because they pack in so much information on each page. Though the medium only allows the reader to understand Winslow so well, the writer manages to cram in so much minutia and character detail in so natural a way to paint a very vivid picture of a complete life. The snapshot we get here points to a rich history and a fully lived in world. It’s easy to imagine the characters living their lives outside the pages we get in this short. The story we do get is powerful, direct, and packs a lot of staying power. This is thanks to instantly engaging characters, even as the premise and plot take their time to unfold.

Winslow really was the main draw for me in this script. Though I’m not normally one for constant voice over, the writer presents the story in such a stylized cool way that I was completely on board. Winslow has that classic hardboiled detective sound that flirts with cliché, but I found compelling. It was interesting just seeing the way he looks at the world through his dialogue.

It made for compelling moment to moment fun even without the bombastic plot points. A distinct cast and twisting plot points are calling cards of this script. There’s a lot of fun to be had with the concept, but it was the depth of the characters and their complex choices that impressed me. This is a script that doesn’t stray too far from classic noire conventions, but knows how to use them to maximal effect. I enjoyed the turns of the plot and the grit of the narrative. A good read all in all.

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RENO-TAHOE SCREENPLAY CONTEST SPRING 2021 - QUARTER FINALIST
FILMATIC COMEDY AWARDS 2019, SEASON 4 - FINALIST
AUSTIN COMEDY SHORT FILM FESTIVAL 2018 - 3RE PLACE - BEST DARK COMEDY SCREENPLAY SHORT

Submitted: March 10, 2018
Last Updated: April 3, 2022

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The Writer: Gene Gwynne

I’ve had representation in the past, but am currently without representation, and am not a WGA member. I’ve attended seminars and classes by most of the screenplay gurus including Field, Segar, Freeman, among others; and attended workshops, classes, and lectures sponsored by The American Film Institute and the USC Cinema-Television Alumni Association extension program. I was optioned once by a major television producer. Go to bio

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