Rebellion by Aiden Van Dyke | Script Revolution

Rebellion

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Myself
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Society has fallen into another "Great Depression", an evil politic called The Dread takes control of the country and everyone's lives. Many try and rid themselves in The Dreads plan, but it's not that easy.
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Lucas is one of the only people who has been able to rid himself of The Dread's tracking methods and wants to be disconnected from society. He seems to have accomplished this for quite some time till a stranger named Isaac meets him in his apartment. Everything changes after their conversation

I'm looking for some feedback on the story of the script rater than my writing style, punctuation, grammar etc. This is only the first draft of the screenplay so I myself don't think its brilliant that is why I've put this online looking for some feedback while I go back and edit the story myself. I'm aware that some things may not make sense to the reader and it's just in my head but I hope for some productive feedback on the story so I can further improve this script.

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The Writer: Aiden Van Dyke

I'm a 16 year old writer and dircetor from Australia. I'm looking for some feeback for my scripts to help me become better at story telling! Go to bio