Sentient by Tina Balli | Script Revolution

Sentient

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death experience/meditation experience
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A man awakes on a dinghy, and questions his awareness, when a mermaid appears.
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A sleepy man lies on a dinghy in calm waters, under the night sky, and a full moon. He is awoken by a mermaid, who pops her head out of the water, and props her arms on the dinghy. He is confused, and asks, 'Am I dreaming?' 'Are you sleeping?' He replies, 'I don't think so. Am I dead then?' 'Are you breathing?' He checks. He is. 'But where am I?'..'On the edge.'....'of what?'
She points to the full moon, descending, getting larger, brighter...'Life'. He panics as the boat fills with water. 'It's time, ' she tells him...'But I don't want to die!'
'You already did, a hundred times.' She pulls him into the water, and disappears under the waves. The brightest light blinds him. He closes his eyes, screams. His scream transforms into a baby's scream, as he opens his eyes to see a close up of a blurry face of a doctor.
He is a newborn baby. The doctor hands the now female child to its mother. 'Congratulations, it's a girl.'

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Life, death, and mermaids.

GAVIN, a man of no definite age, lies alone, bobbing gently on the water.

Gavin sleeps in a dinghy on the open sea, drifting along blissfully unaware of what's to come. A mermaid appears startling him awake.

Gavin
Am I dreaming?

Enveloped as he is in the mystery of his circumstance, we have no choice but to continue - if only for ourselves.

Gavin
But where am I?

Mermaid
On the edge.

The dialogue well-crafted and precise; Gavin asks all the right questions to reveal his destiny.

He begins to pant fast, holding his chest. She smiles.

Starkly revealing, this script showcases amazing prowess in its ability to tap into the power of visual storytelling. Clocking in at a mere two pages, it manages to paint a vivid and engrossing tale that will stick with the reader far beyond the time it takes to read it.

The light is larger now, much closer. The mermaid offers her hand.

Tina manages to tap into a collective subconscious giving little in the way of direct explanation. Her unique take on fantasy furthers the spectacle and absolutely grips the audience from the very beginning until its remarkable end.

His shoulders sink below the waves. He screams, before his head disappears under the water.

The ubiquity of its story and depth of subject matter lends itself to success. Considering the eminence of The Shape of Water, I can see it performing spectacularly on a festival circuit. Filmmakers take note, with practical effects taking precedence, this film will be a joy to make.

Sentient is a visual treat and fantastical tour de force.

Review by Matthew Portman

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The Writer: Tina Balli

Studied at LCCA, creative media, where I wrote 'Spotted Dick, the Musical,' a comedy short, in song! Check it on my YouTube channel, LEMONADE BUDGET, where I also have crafty tutorials..  I self published 4 novels. creator of 'the demon realm', tarot deck and book. all available to buy online. Studied occult for 40 years, so my writing reflects this. my books are, 'Aquarius', Tarot of the Demons', Isabella Black Heart', and 'The Tunnel.' I concentrate fully on script writing now, as it has become my first love, but I am an artist, and occasionally get time to paint or makestuff. You can see my art on deviantart, pinterest, under 'demoncreator. I have been writing since a child, 1st... Go to bio

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