The Head In The Heartland by Bill Neary | Script Revolution

The Head In The Heartland

In 1994, a bright young schoolgirl finds escape from her rural constraints in an idealistic young parolee facing prison with escape plans of his own. Based on true events.

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This gritty, sometimes witty nonlinear story starts at the beginning of the end of a traumatic event that occurred in a small rural Pennsylvania town back in 1994.

Ana is a bright high school sophomore who becomes implicated in the suicide of her idealistic parolee boyfriend Bryan. When Ana's called to the death scene, Detective Braeburn conducts a routine interview that takes us back through her whirlwind romance, where Ana struggles to encourage Bryan of a future worth living for, while he despairs over an impending prison sentence that threatens to tear them apart.

Ana's personal investigation uncovers clues into Bryan's past trauma, connected to his estranged father Ronald. She tries to enlist the sympathetic Braeburn to investigate, but with only circumstantial evidence, Ana's left to struggle with her own despair. Only Ana's widowed father Red can help her come to terms with maters outside of their control.

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OVERALL (TSL)

"At first glance, I thought this story was going to be some run-of-the-mill mystery surrounding a tragedy that isn't exactly what it seems on the surface. Yet, instead, what I read was a dynamic-driven character study, introspective to the touchy subjects of mental illness, religion, and existentialism, set during a time where these matters were either taken for what they were or had yet to be taken seriously in certain levels."

"Let me start off by saying: man, that was fucked up. I mean that in a good way. In fact, I mean that in the best way. It's not everyday that I get to read something that's bold, honest, and uncomfortable, and this script really delivered on all counts."

"This is a very touching and heartfelt story that uses structure beautifully to retell the tragic events of love lost, quite literally."

CHARACTERS (TSL)

"Your character writing is simply marvelous. Each of your characters has such a lifelike energy. Not only that, but they act in ways that are somehow both believable and unpredictable. If that's not the mark of a talented writer, then I don't know what is."

"Immensely interesting; each and every single character has been molded with their own characteristics and personalities, and it never feels like one of them could be a carbon copy of another."

"There's a lot [of] depth to these characters and the way the writer treats this difficult subject matter is extremely well done, giving the audience an emotional reprieve towards the end despite the loss and tragedy. This speaks to the craft of storytelling, and so is an excellent script."

PLOT (TSL)

"I think there are a lot of ways in which this story could have gone terribly wrong.... But it never did."

"Compelling, thought-provoking, and heartbreaking all at the same time."

"There's a very clear forward moving plot here that is heavily steeped in theme of the tragedy and pain of all consuming love and loss."

STRUCTURE (TSL)

"Usually a screenplay with a story that relies heavily on flashbacks is tough to pull off, but I think you have done well here. It helps that you have really thought through the transitions in between the past and the present."

"Clear and concise. Superb vocabulary and constructive language. It all draws us in and gives us good visual representation of what a character could be thinking, feeling, or even trying to emote."

"The structure found within this script is flawless. A sequence script that delivers a perfect circle closing...."

CONCEPT
(TSL)
"Wonderful [concept]. The people behind this story truly have something to say and... it's a character study, with a look into some interesting muses of minds that even a modern audience could relate to. I have high hopes for the fate of this project."

(RAINDANCE)
"The concept of this script is fantastic. It is quite rare to find media representations of suicide that handle the topic with this amount of respect and nuance."

Submitted: December 7, 2021
Last Updated: December 28, 2021

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The Writer: Bill Neary

I’ve launched dozens of stories as a multi-disciplined commercial artist, but my cinematic vision soars as a dramatist. With recent accolades and a short play produced, I continue developing short- and feature-length scripts with an existential nod. Currently polishing up a few dramas, my goal is to develop psychological sci-fi that challenges, celebrates and entertains our notions of humanity. Go to bio

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