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Shootin' The Shorts is run by J.E. Clarke a longtime prolific screenwriter who loves to give others a little boost in the marketplace by highlighting why she believes their short script may stand out. She brings with her a loyal band of readers who share the same compassionate attitude who have joined her cause as it's grown and grown to connect writers with filmmakers on a monthly basis. Now it finds a home here on Script Revolution.

This is all about highlighting what makes a script great by focusing on the positives. You'll find no negative criticism or lists of issues here. Submitting a short script for consideration couldn't be easier, simply scroll down to the bottom of your script edit page and tick the "Submit to Shootin' The Shorts" checkbox. Please note; it takes time to get through all submissions, everything is subjective, and we're by no means saying these are the best short scripts on Script Revolution, they are simply the ones that have found an admirer within this section - CJ

Beyond Treatment - Your audiences will appreciate the sensitive look at PTSD

Surviving a traumatic experience doesn’t always mean you move on with your life. One may be haunted by the memories of the incident … for years or decades to come. Triggering events, nightmares, an inability to cope with everyday challenges – life becomes almost literal Hell.

And it’s that much worse when you feel responsible for the tragedy. Then guilt slips into the equation; building an ominous nest in your mind…

And that’s Larry’s situation. The wheelchair-bound protagonist of Thorsten Loo’s Beyond Treatment, Larry’s suffering a serious case of PTSD, following the violent murder of his wife. Larry’s troubles are mounting day by day: complaints about his outbursts threaten to have him committed. And his therapist has exhausted her standard techniques. Now, she’s at a complete loss. And Larry’s at his wit’s end:

Emilia lays her glasses down on the desk. Eyes him with worry lines on her forehead.

Really, Larry – I don’t know what else I could do for you. I’ve tried just about anything I could think of. I think you’re beyond treatment.

Or is he? Sometimes extreme problems demand radical solutions. Larry just might get through this.

There are a number of good films that tastefully capture the struggles of a person living with PTSD. For instance, The Deer Hunter, Jacob’s Ladder, Mystic River, Brothers and a personal favorite – spoiler alert! – Stay. In a related vein, Beyond Treatment focuses on what treatment could look like: everything that could go right…and wrong.

Interested in investigating that visually? Your audiences will appreciate the sensitive look at PTSD that Beyond Treatment provides. Not to mention a bit of something else: a script that’s totally engaging and provocative – with just the right dose of irony. And a twist of “fate’s” evil knife…

Pages: 7

Budget: Low to moderate. Needs a room where you can nail boards to the walls.

The Script

Beyond Treatment

Larry suffers from a posttraumtic stress syndrome after he lost his wife in a brutal assault. When all attempts to treat him fail, his psychiatrist decides to take an unusual all-out approach in confrontational therapy...

About The Reviewer

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Julia Cottle is a cultural anthropologist living in Chicago. She has worked for years as a university instructor and researcher for organizations committed to social justice. She always has loved to write, but only recently has discovered the joy of film and stage writing.Read more

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Sex and Violins - Written with a gentle – and slightly twisted – sense of humor

It can be hard to write a love story… It’s been done so many times, in so many ways.* Romeo and Juliet. When Harry Met Sally. Titanic. Pretty Woman. The Notebook. Ghost. The list goes on. How to make such a time worn concept still seem fresh? Well, sometimes to pays to just it simple and sweet – with just a touch of kinkiness.

Jackie – the heroine of Sex and Violins – isn’t faring well in the dating game. When the script opens, she’s just been dumped… via Post-It note stuck to her forehead. You see, she’s got a few strange, um, habits that seem to drive men away. At the office, her best friend Bette tries to set her up with Tom. Jackie’s worried: if Tom finds out her dark secret, it’ll be game over once again. Despite her misgivings, Jackie agrees to go on a date. After all, Tom’s a cutie. Needless to say, the date doesn’t go as planned. But is that a bad or good thing?

Written with a gentle – and slightly twisted – sense of humor, Sex and Violins has tons of memorable lines. (For instance, Jackie telling Bette about getting dumped: He didn’t even tell you to your face? No. He left me a note.). A little gem, S&Voffers everything a comedy director could wish for. Empathetic characters, a touch of sex… and a fresh twist to the age-old tale of love.

About the writer: David M Troop resumed writing in 2011 after a twenty-five year hiatus.  Since then, he has written about 50 short scripts, two of which have been produced.   Dave would like to make it three.  He is a regular, award-winning contributor to  Born on the mean streets of Reading, PA, Dave now resides in Schuylkill Haven with his wife Jodi and their two lazy dogs Max and Mattie.

Pages: 8

Budget: Reasonable. Two main characters (and a few supporting ones), coupled with a handful of settings. Nothing exotic; just a bedroom, office, restaurant and a room with a stage…

* Folks, get your minds out of the gutter. We’re talkin’ love stories, not sex scenes! Well… mostly anyway.

About The Reviewer

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Known for her unique characters and plots, J.E. Clarke has optioned her feature length horror, "Containment" with Primestar Film Group (director Mike Elliott of Scorpion King 4 attached) and her SF feature "Stream" with Purryburry Productions, John Noble of "Fringe...Read more

About The Writer

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Dave Troop began writing as soon as he could hold a No. 2 pencil. In 2012, he discovered the beauty and the challenge of the five page screenplay while writing short scripts for and Simplyscripts. Dave continues to write and review short scripts for Script Revolution and Shootin'...Read more

I Swear, Inc - take a f**#@%% chance on this great premise

They say the most honest people swear a lot. Well, I like to – bleepbleepbleep – believe that’s true. But given the colorful variety of obscenity, who comes up with this s*** day by day?

I Swear Inc. gives us one legtimiate theory: a humorous comedy with an edge of darkness and a happy ending. (Don’t you dare make a joke – there are no innuendos here!)

Still: only a real dumb %!**#@ would let this script slip away.

In I Swear Inc, time’s running out for Doug and Ralph – the mastermind creators of I Swear Incorporated. What the Hell (oops, “Heck”) is ISI? A super-secret company that every year has to find the new ‘it’ word. One every foul-mouthed curser would love to say.

It’s a job Doug and Ralph take quite seriously. But this year’s been tough… they’re running out of time to find their gem. Determined to exhaust all creative outlets, the two even resort to a little torture on their road to discovery. But never fear: all victims are voluntary and compensated. These gents are professionals.

As with any good service, you need a sample group to trial your product on. With the help of their testers, profanity (or ‘Sentence Enhancing’ as Doug and Ralph prefer to say) is bound to evolve every year. By leaps and bounds.

Do you have a (*&()(*#& idea where this is leading? Well, they THINK they’ve found a gem in “kackersquat”:

I’ve had just about enough of your

Ralph considers his statement.

Kackersquat… hmmm…
(shaking his head)
Too long. Doesn’t roll off the tongue.

It’s a shame kackersquat didn’t make it, but take a look at I Swear Inc. And imagine what did make the grade!

What makes a script truly great? Take a simple idea and bring it to its logical (comedic) conclusion. It worked in The Hudsucker Proxy, and it could work for you as well. If you’re the smart director you think you are, take a f**#@%% chance on this great premise. And get 2016 off to a roaring start!

Pages: 5

Budget: Very affordable. A room and some comedic stars is all you need!

The Script

I Swear Inc.

Since 1959, a secret company has existed whose job is to place one curse word into the English vocabulary every year -- in order to keep the language thriving and on the cutting edge.

About The Writer

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Jason Allen is a writer and filmmaker from Nashville, TN. He is also a wilderness guide, nature photographer and award-winning journalist.

His first feature film, Lucky Fritz, premiered at Cannes in 2009. He's won Best Screenplay honors at the Nashville Film Festival, San Diego Film...Read more


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