Synopsis/Details
All Accolades & Coverage
Coverage excerpt from Story Data:
- The script has a good premise for a romantic dramedy at its core. There's clear tension and a love interest/angle set up from the start.
- The first half of Act 1 does a good job at setting up the world of the story and describing the protagonist in action -- we get who he is. Jerry is clearly defined and we see his wounds/flaws, and how he'll need to grow/change by the end of the script.
- Paula's approach when she finally meets Jerry and they have lunch together is a good twist-- she wants to study him and doesn't believe in love. This sets them up as complete opposites, and clearly shows tension and intrigue from the start of the relationship, engaging the audience.
- The midpoint, where Jerry and Carol break up, comes at the right point (page 59), clearly sending the story in a new direction as Jerry's love theory has been defeated.
- Interesting twist that Jerry and Aaron decide to move in together, renounce love, and just have meaningless sex on the side. It's a good break into Act 3.
- In Act 3 we finally see Paula and Jerry engaging more in discussions about their opposing theories, after he moves in with Aaron: this is what we want more of! The rest of Act 3 shows them engaging and communicating more, and we wish we'd seen more of this all along.
- On page 103, good twist that Jerry's work is based on a constant that isn't constant-- another area in his life that's falling apart.
