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Jam - Traffic Can Be MURDER

JAM
Traffic can be murder…

In "Close Encounters Of The Third Kind", Richard Dreyfuss' character Roy Neary is an electric company lineman in rural Indiana. Stopped in his truck at a railroad crossing, he's lost at a metaphorical crossroads. A man of action, Roy unfolds a map.

Suddenly: a row of mail boxes rattle to his left. His truck loses all power and a giant light engulfs his vehicle from above like a higher power; illuminating Roy's journey towards truth… and a more mysterious world than he thought he knew.

Ray (yes, one vowel away from Roy) is in no hurry in Pete Barry's "Jam". Roy's merely one of many stuck in his car during a Route 37 traffic mess. Fine, he reasons patiently. Let’s take advantage with some AM radio and a nap. Leaning back, he closes his eyes. But then the radio starts to crackle…

And emits a NOISE. It’s not static; more a rumbling snarl, topped with a whistling teakettle shriek.

Ray grimaces and twists the knob again. Then, beneath the ugly sound, a conversation emerges:

LATE (V.O.)
- can’t be late for this meeting!

OFFICE LACKY (V.O.)
Calm down. You’ve still got twenty minutes.

Ray turns up the volume, curious.

LATE (V.O.)
He said the next time I missed a meeting, forget it, I’m pink slipped.

OFFICE LACKY (V.O.)
I’ll talk to him. Where are you?

LATE (V.O.)
I’m stuck in traffic! There’s a goddamn overturned truck on route 37!

Ray sits up, looks around. Everyone's on their cell phones. And he can HEAR THEM ALL. His radio is a conduit to the conversations in the other cars!.

At first, it's all fun and games as Ray listens to a conversation between a young, beautiful woman in the car next to him, describing her panties to a deep-voiced man. But, the mood instantly sobers when he turns the dial.

At 610 he finds a different conversation:

SIGHTLINE (V.O.)
-might be listening, this guy. The signals are bleeding together, we could be compromised.

COMMAND (V.O.)
We’ve got to keep off the radio. Do you have a bead on him?

SIGHTLINE (V.O.)
I’ve got him in crosshairs. He’s listening to 610 on the AM dial.

The funny thing about hearing things unintended for your ears is - you can never un-hear them, no matter how hard you try. And Ray has heard too much.

Soon, he breaks from his car in a sprint, not knowing what he’s escaping from. But you can't run from the unknown, you can only hope it passes. Like a traffic jam.

As a script, Jam is “jammed packed” with excellent dialogue, paced to perfection. Lined bumper to bumper with fun and intrigue, directors should be revving to hit the gas and drive this script home. Jam’ll be relatively easy to pull off with the right location - and 70 friends with cars.

The Script

Jam

Ray's stuck in traffic, going nowhere...until the voices start to pour out of his radio.

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I am a Los Angeles-based writer. With a degree in journalism, news writing and editing gave me a superb foundation for my love of story and telling it via the written word. I have written several TV specs and two TV pilots along with several features. The three featured on this site: the "The Confession" was optioned by Little Flame Films July of 2021; "Brandy" is a sitcom pilot that has placed well in several contests; and the sci-fi/thriller feature "Battle Of Wills," which placed as a...Read more

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Pete Barry is a playwright, screenwriter, actor, director and musician. He is a co-founder of the Porch Room, an independent film and theatre production company, and has produced and directed several collections of short plays, including Five Cornered Thinking at the New York Comedy Club and Burt Reynolds Amazing Napalm Powered Oven and Other Paid Programming in the 2001 New York Fringe Festival. He shared the 2009 NJACT Perry Award for Outstanding Production of an Original Play for...Read more

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