Two months ago, I indirectly requested that some kind soul take a glance at my recent screenplay Baby Huey. Not a single person took the bait. Thus, I have sunk to bartering the first wife and a pontoon boat in exchange for a look at Baby Huey. The first wife may run off as she did with me, but the pontoon boat is a steal once you fix the leaks and replace the seats. Am also willing to throw in a couple of rod-and-reels and an antique tackle box. I love Baby Huey, which means I'm too close to it to see its faults. So if you're in search of a quick read and need a pontoon boat to adorn the backyard and a middle-aged woman to communicate with and clean up occasionally if you finance her weekly casino jaunts, then take a look at Baby Huey. I will be eternally grateful because I cannot get anyone to read it. JH
I was gonna take the bait, even though I already have a pontoon boat that doesn't leak and don't want a wife, unless she cleans the house and I get to be the fun wife to my hubby. BUT it's 129 pages, why so long?! Looks interesting though and if it's as snappy as your humor above, then...yay! I'm in the middle of a contracted rewrite and when that's done, we must go to Oklahoma for our son's Army basic training graduation. Then after that it's all downhill busy time again.
What are you hoping to accomplish from a "quick" read? Just peer feedback?
Thanks, Cannon, for the response. I honestly thought this thread was dead in the water. First, congratulations on your son's basic training graduation in Oklahoma. Arkansas, where I live, is next door to Oklahoma. Second, you can never have enough pontoon boats. Third, as for what I'm hoping to accomplish from a quick read of Baby Huey--a simple answer to the question is it boring. Yes, it is a bit a long. And yes, contemporary conventions dictate a reduction. But I honestly cannot justify one scene that could be eliminated. It's like a row of standing dominos: if one is eliminated the ripple effect ceases. And finally, my ex says that what I was suggesting was unethical and possibly criminal, so that's off the table. Again, thanks for the response. JH
LOL on the ex and true about the pontoon boats...we could stash one down on another bay...hmmm. There is 110 miles of shoreline on our lake. I've never been to Oklahoma or Arkansas. I hear it's hot and humid. So glad we get to go in August. It's hot here too, but we have a refreshing (cold) lake.
I gotcha on eliminating scenes. If you are going to be pitching it around, it is likely you will need to shorten it. But it only takes one yes, so you do you! On the rewrite I'm doing, I am having to eliminate one of the supporting characters...who was my favorite with all the best lines imo. Once you start, the dominoes do fall into place.
However, I'm sure it's not boring! You seem witty. And your other script was loved at 121 pages here on SR, so feel confident!
If I can get of the darn internet and focus on my task at hand, then I'll have some time to read Young Huey. What would you rate it (ie PG, R etc)? I won't read (or watch) anything too smutty. I used to, but as a mom of 4, that changed.
Blessings!
Cannon, I'm almost of a mind to hitch the pontoon to a trailer and meet you in Oklahoma. Baby Huey is basically a cautionary tale about drug abuse aimed at young adults. Heavy on street slang, but no smut. PG-17. If you do get a chance to read it, I think you'll like it. Thanks for the kind words. And blessings to you as well.
I'm no stranger to that as I was raised by an addict. Which is why I write light-hearted stuff! I am interested to read it. It may be in the winter when I'm hibernating, but hopefully you get someone to read it before then.
James,
Perhaps we can help each other out. I too am in love with the story that I've written a screenplay about. I've been involved with this story for twenty years between research, co-authoring the book, interviews, working with people in the industry, and now writing the screenplay as requested by the director, Errol Morris. I'm a little too close to the story, and I've had a tendency to write too much, which I've worked on. It's down to a tolerable 116 pages. I'm expected to send it to Errol soon, and prior to getting a consultant as I was expecting. Would you be open to a screenplay swap? I'd be happy to jump right into your screenplay if you're available to look at mine. I love humor, and I've added some comedic elements to what is basically a dramatic true story. As one five year old once said to another, I'll show you mine if you show me yours.