Synopsis/Details
All Accolades & Coverage
Creative World Award scorecard and judge comments:
TITLE OF SCREENPLAY: Project Endolon - 'Entity Zero'
WRITER (S): Thorsten Loos
Judge's Recommendation: Consider
Computer Average of all 5 Categories (1-10): 8.33
Overall view of basics: Good (1-10) 8.30
Overall view of Structure: Good (1-10) 8.31
Overall view of Characterization: Good (1-10) 8.17
Overall view of Dialogue: Good (1-10) 8.25
Overall view of Trend & Commercial Potential: Very Good (1-10) 8.60
JUDGE'S PERSONAL COMMENTS:
The screenplay has an excellent setup and resolution. Derek enters the wormhole vortex in his futuristic suit to try and avert global disaster. In the end, he successfully accomplishes his goal. However, Derek is not completely successful so that future episodes may introduce new challenges to face. The story also has some interesting twists as we learn that the wormhole leads through time. The phenomenon is effecting multiple timelines and so the conflict will apparently unfold across history. Derek is well developed as a strong, active protagonist, with a clear and immediate goal. The high stakes situation with the wormhole pushes Derek to take decisive action, as he is the most qualified person to operate the suit and figure out how to stop the phenomenon. This is an excellent setup on the hero and the ending is great!
The dialogue does a pretty good job of introducing the characters and setting up this world. There is excellent commercial potential in this screenplay. This is a high-stakes science-fiction adventure. Although this pilot works as a satisfying stand-alone episode, it also sets up the elements which could launch the series. A few clichéd moments stick out like a sore thumb in a script which is otherwise polished, exciting, and original. Overall this is a highly entertaining screenplay which is already strong enough to warrant a consideration. Nice job!
