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“I think it’s a really good writing sample. I don’t know how easy it would be to market this, but it feels like—if you sharpen the focus and tighten up the dialog—it could work as an HBO drama. The real problem is, no one is going to know what it’s about until they get to page 25. You need to figure out a way to hook readers (viewers) with Sybil’s multiple personality dilemma before page 10.
“It has a lot of potential, but you need to put the reason you wrote this story into the story, and make sure people will want to read/see the next episode.
“It is a good piece of dramatic writing. It is a TV show I would be interested in watching. But, I feel it needs a lot of work. I may be wrong in my conclusion, but for me, this screenplay has great potential, but doesn’t quite live up to it’s subject matter.
“The problems I had with your story are not simple structural, format, wordsmithing problems (although I do think [many] of your word choices seem vague or lazy). Nor did I have problems with your characters or dialog (although I do feel some of your dialog sounds labored or false).
“Although I love puzzles, the author needs to convey more than just a jumble of scenes. The protagonist may be split like shards of glass, but the author is responsible for crafting the story pieces so they fit together in a meaningful way. Better yet, she needs the pieces to fit together in a way that feels planned and inevitable (like a jig saw [sic] puzzle designer).
“Abstract Creatures is an interesting read by a smart author. But, I want to read a compelling story. A fascinating story. If you are going to risk losing my attention by writing a complicated storyline, you must do it with perfect clarity. You are walking a tightrope. You are performing a high wire act. You need to enthrall your audience. Good writing is too low a benchmark for your story. I want to gasp.” —Frank “Leslie” Davis (Apr. 2020)