A magical manuscript holds the key to power, as forces battle to retrieve it.
Type:
Feature
Status:
For sale
Page Count:
113pp
Genre:
Fantasy, Sci-Fi
Budget:
Blockbuster
Age Rating:
13+
Synopsis/Details
Over 2,000 years ago, on the Libyan Egyptian border at a Sybil temple in the Siwa Oasis, an Immortal Priestess, Lamia, the Sybil, pens a manuscript concerning a prophecy of man’s future where a strange plague will change the biology of man. The prophecy also stated that when the time comes, a priest of legend would rise, open the manuscript and save Earth from those entities that seek to entrap humanity. Amazon’s were the protectors of Sybil temples. The Amazonian queen Hehet entrusted her warriors to take the manuscript, known as the ‘Gnamez Emur’ to an immortal colony of a Sibylline Ethiopian order to keep it safe from Roman Papacy theft. Fast forward to present day: A young Egyptologist, also an immortal - Carli Sanders, discovers an ancient pyramid temple in the Siwa Oasis; a Jesuit Priest, Father Jordan, discovers the manuscript – Gnamez Emur in the Vatican library archives, and an immortal Coptic Priest, Father Manthos discovers he’s the hero of legend who will open the manuscript to save humanity. None of these three characters know each other yet, but it is their destiny to meet and, together, save the world. Fortunately, the three are able to find each other via their mutual acquaintance, Dr. Amir Hawad, the curator of the Grand Egyptian Museum in Cairo, Egypt. With Hawad’s help, Jordan and Carli meet, and both set out together with different agendas to find Manthos. Jordan, the Jesuit Priest emissary, is able to get the manuscript into Manthos’ hands. Before Jordan is able to view the opening of the ancient manuscript; he is apprehended by the Black Pope’s henchmen, Armand Goddart and Ivan Braden, two Vatican See Jesuits, and jailed. Manthos manages to escape with Carli and the manuscript, returning to the Immortal Cavern, which resides a colony of immortal beings. In the temple, Manthos opens the Gnamez Emur and learns that he must journey to Siwa Oasis temple to unlock a message for mankind. Together, Manthos and Carli arrive at the Siwa temple in Egypt. Manthos learns from a Sand Sybil that he must use the manuscript to destroy alien satellite grids around Earth that prevents humanity DNA from evolving into immortals and consequently free humanity from Reptilian control. After several close battles with the Black Pope’s henchmen under the full moon, the Black Pope’s whirlwind desert attack, and a golden Sand Dragon protecting the Giza Pyramid, Manthos and Carli manage to enter the Giza pyramid. Manthos must undergo an initiation in order to activate the Giza pyramid and other world pyramids based on light harmonics to destroy the reptilian planetary grid satellites. Everyone in the world is freed from the reptilian artificial DNA manipulation and superpowers begin to manifest in human beings all around the globe. Infuriated with his defeat, the Black Pope captures Manthos and Carli and has them tortured. Luckily, Manthos manages to free himself and Carli; killing the Black Pope’s henchmen. Jordan is going through a similar situation, locked in the Vatican jail, he uses his newfound superpower to free himself, find and kill the Reptilian shapeshifting Black Pope. The Immortal Priestess, Lamia the Sybil takes the Gnamez Emur manuscript to an extraterrestrial Council on Saturn, becoming the first ambassador for Earth in the Galactic Governing Council of the Seven Realms.
All Accolades & Coverage

Blacklist Reader:
Fans of the arena should enjoy the story, as it deals with themes of identity and community, as the persecuted chase a magical MacGuffin manuscript which holds the key to survival, as opposing sides have long chased it throughout history. The writer's passion and knowledge for the genre are present on every page, as they throw ample set pieces at their characters, which crescendos into a powerful third act and resolution. Contemporary Hollywood is increasingly embracing fantasy films mixed with more sophisticated writing, and this story could be a good fit for managers seeking to expand this avenue of their roster.

Scriptwolf:
Story: Excitement from the very first page, a lot of elements but I think the rewatchability of this movie will be high because of it.
Premise: There is always an audience for science fiction or fantasy films and I think this story will absolutely appeal to modern fans of the genre.

Overall, the plot of Becoming Immortal is a well-executed story. The narrative is coherent, the stakes are high, and the characters have clear and distinct goals. The reader likes the concept of a search for an ancient text that nullifies religions. The women characters are strong and admirable. Very compelling and original. Other story elements that distinguish Becoming Immortal from its competitors are its twists and turns. Becoming Immortal is never quite what you think it is. It starts out as an ancient story about a sacred scroll that must be hidden from the Romans; it then transforms into an adventure with present-day archeologists and priests working together to recover the ancient scrolls; finally it crystalizes into a sci-fi conspiracy involving evil aliens wanting to prevent human beings from reaching their full potential. While all of these elements are traditionally told as individual stories, Becoming Immortal does a stellar job of uniting these disparate concepts and creating a truly unique and exciting adventure for audiences of all ages to enjoy.

Paigecatsmith:
The characters of Becoming Immortal are, for the most part, well-crafted. Your storytelling skills are demonstrated well with this script. It’s always a smart idea to write about things happening now and this script definitely feels of the time. The way technology is involved and the pandemic element makes this very recognizably the 2020s but the story itself has universal and timeless appeal. Fantasies and science fiction help audiences to see their own world in a different way and I love how you have captured that spirit for our present generation.
Hopefully you’re able to find something of value in my notes as you move forward with this project. You have proven yourself to be a talented writer! Your vision is so clear and I can tell you’re passionate about the story. I look forward to seeing where you take it from here!

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The Writer: Carmen Boykin

I write innovative and iconic scripts. Writing is a visionary process, it has a magic that empowers the soul. The revelation of this magic assists me in writing unique screenplays. I've written several scripts, and currently writing a graphic novel based on one of my scripts, recommended by a producer. I've received coverage from a couple of producers and script consultants with 'consider' and 'recommend' ratings. Linda Seger - Hollywood Script doctor and William M. Akers - a screenwriter/ director, have been my early and memorable script consultants. Script consultants are your mastermind support system. Alien Prophecy received a 'Consider' in the AAA Screen Writing Contest, placing in the… Go to bio
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