Serpentine

Semifinalist: Roadmap Writers Screenwriting Contest Top 10: Creative Screenwriting Competition Coverage Notes Excerpts From Launchpad Feature Competition By the Tracking Board Serpentine is an ambitious and structurally sound thriller that explores themes of motherhood, past lives, and murder set against a chilly Boston winter backdrop. The main characters work well, with Casey's struggling single mom being portrayed with a maturity and naturalism that benefits the resourcefulness and relatability of her role. The reincarnation element is obviously the big genre hook to this movie and the script more or less succeeds in exploring it. Overall the script is written with great visual language and has a professional polish. The blocking and direction are clear and much of the dialogue is realistic and solid. Only some minor hiccups in terms of plot concepts being introduced hinder the script's quality and with some small adjustments there's tons of potential for the material. Coverage Notes Excerpts From The Screenplay Mechanic (Andrew Hilton) We like some of this author’s traits and he seems to possess the tools necessary to refine this material. For the most part, this scribe has an enjoyable style to read. The bulk of his narrative description is effective and paints a vivid portrait of the story’s Connecticut backdrop. If this writer can make this a leaner, more consistently focused, and logistically-manageable thriller, then it could work well as a sub $6M indie. NOTE: Serpentine is a mystery/thriller, NOT an action thriller. The script was subsequently shortened by 20 pages without compromising the misdirection required in a mystery.