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FROM COVERAGE INK-OCTOBER 2017
CONCLUSION Based on the strengths of the premise and the current draft, future development is warranted on the project. This development would best start with the structure of the narrative to make sure that the details of the conspiracy are revealed slowly throughout the screenplay to keep the reader engaged. The story would also benefit from adding more danger, which can be used to raise the stakes.
While adjusting the narrative, there is also room to spend more time developing an antagonist's personality (perhaps Mayor Garcia) and that individual's relationship with Jack, the protagonist.
Despite the areas for improvement, The Ecstasy has great potential on a conceptual level and the current draft is at times engaging, in large part thanks to the well-written dialogue. Nice job, and best of luck moving forward!
SCRIPT: CONSIDER WITH RESERVATIONS
WRITER: CONSIDER WITH RESERVATIONS
ACADEMY NICHOLL FELLOWSHIP SEPTEMBER 2019
In the opening teaser we see Ron commit what seems to be a vigilante murder and then get involved in a public outrage story that sees his daughter run away from home and his wife kill herself then the narrative turns to Jack.
There’s a lot of things going well in this script, in particular the intricate plot that’s well-crafted and develops at a nice pace, the read is interested and leaves the reader wanting to know what happens next. Jack, the main character, is interesting and feels unique in that he doesn’t fall into the lawyer-with-a-conscience trope.
The dialog is well done throughout and makes good use of subtext, the tone and the situation is consistent without being on-the-nose.
The writing quality is good and there’s a nice confidence to the scenes that deal with legal issues and local Miami politics. The sex club scenes are also well done, feeling genuinely sexy without being gratuitous.
This is something that can be hard to pull off. This was good read with a surprise twist ending. Job well done.
