A security-obsessed husband and his wife must confront a ruthless criminal syndicate that has marked their home for invasion, forcing them to fight not only for their survival but also to salvage their tattered marriage.
Type:
Feature
Status:
Seeking finance
Page Count:
118pp
Genre:
Crime, Drama, Horror, Thriller
Budget:
Independent
Age Rating:
17+
Synopsis/Details
Johannesburg, 2021. As riots and crime waves engulf the city in the wake of civil unrest, Ray Fanning, a hardened private security CEO, finds himself caught between his duty to protect and the growing corruption within the industry he helped build. The story begins with Ray and Dani enjoying a peaceful evening at Bruma Lake, where they are attacked by Gerry Joan, a disheveled and menacing figure. Gerry demands money, and when Ray refuses, a violent confrontation ensues. Ray manages to fend off Gerry, but not without sustaining injuries. Dani, pregnant at the time, is traumatised by the attack. The incident leaves a lasting scar on their relationship, as Ray struggles with guilt over not being able to fully protect Dani. The attack sets the tone for the rest of the story, as Ray becomes increasingly paranoid and obsessed with security. He installs elaborate security systems in their home, including electric fences, surveillance cameras, and panic rooms. However, his obsession with safety begins to strain his marriage, as Dani feels suffocated by the constant fear and isolation. A year after the attack, Ray and Dani are still grappling with the aftermath. Dani is emotionally distant, haunted by the loss of their unborn child during the attack. Ray, now working for Kimora Security, is consumed by his work and his need to protect Dani, but his methods are extreme and often alienate her. The couple's relationship is further strained when Dani discovers she is pregnant again, but she keeps it a secret from Ray, unsure of their future together. Meanwhile, Ray becomes entangled in a dangerous game with Liam Koen, a ruthless businessman and rival security firm owner. Liam offers Ray a merger between their companies, but Ray refuses, sensing that Liam's intentions are far from benign. Liam, however, is not one to take no for an answer, and he begins to manipulate events behind the scenes, using Ray's past against him. The story takes a darker turn when Ray and Dani's home is targeted by a group of intruders, led by Lipha, a man with a personal vendetta against Ray. Lipha, who lost his arm in a previous encounter with Ray, is part of a larger criminal syndicate that uses coded markings to identify vulnerable targets. The intruders, wearing welding helmets and gas masks, invade the house, leaving a trail of destruction and violence in their wake. Ray and Dani are forced to fight for their lives as the intruders systematically break through their security measures. Ray's paranoia and obsession with security are put to the test as he realises that the intruders are not just random criminals but part of a larger, more organised network. The syndicate's markings on their walls—symbols like "VF" (Vulnerable Female) and "Pac-Man" (Alarmed House)—reveal that their home has been marked for attack long before the invasion. As the intruders close in, Ray and Dani are separated, each forced to confront their own fears and vulnerabilities. Dani, who has been struggling with feelings of guilt and anger over the loss of their child, finds herself face-to-face with the intruders in a harrowing sequence of events. She manages to fight back, using her wits and determination to survive. Ray, meanwhile, is trapped in the cottage on their property, where he discovers a hidden stash of weapons and ammunition. He uses these to fight back against the intruders, but the situation escalates when Oubaas, the leader of the intruders, reveals that the attack is not just about robbery but about settling a personal score. Oubaas taunts Ray, questioning his manhood and his ability to protect his family. In a climactic showdown, Ray and Dani are reunited, but not without cost. Ray is severely injured, and Dani is forced to make a desperate choice to save them both. The intruders are ultimately defeated, but the victory comes at a great personal cost. The house is left in ruins, and Ray is rushed to the hospital in critical condition. In the aftermath of the attack, Dani is left to pick up the pieces. She confronts Liam Koen, who reveals that he orchestrated the attack as part of a larger plan to force Ray into merging their companies. Liam's cold and calculating nature is laid bare as he tries to manipulate Dani into signing the merger agreement, but she refuses, realising that Liam's vision of power is built on fear and violence. The story ends with Dani taking control of her life and her future. She stands up to the remaining members of the syndicate, using her newfound strength to protect her home and her unborn child. The neighbours, inspired by her courage, rally together to defend their community, signalling a shift from fear to collective action.
All Accolades & Coverage

SCRIPT FEEDBACK by Continuance Pictures: "The Pinch is a high concept and engaging piece. It is fast paced, and action packed while maintaining heart and audience investment. It explores racial and social turmoil within South African society. There is a slow release of information that amps up the tension. The mystery surrounding the inciting incident keeps the audience invested. The characters are well defined, with clear motives and individual voices.
The structure is well done. A clear inciting incident, midpoint and climax are in place. The flashbacks enhance the story. The pacing of the action is great. The dialogue is well suited to the characters, not overdone, with a good mix of heart and authenticity. Very economical dialogue, not expositional or clunky."

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The Writer: Oliver North

Oliver North's directorial debut with Mier “The Ant,” a narrative short film exploring fatherhood, rejection and culture, which he also wrote, premiered at New York African Film Festival, Hollywood African Film Festival, New Filmmakers LA and many more in 2022. He has previously made three successful short films — all of which partially funded by the NFVF, PESP, GFC and secured distribution deals in several territories. Aside from pursuing his creative projects, Mr. North has devoted a great deal of his time to writing several award winning screenplays and developing them into feature film and TV projects from 2014 to present. Go to bio
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