Memory Robbery

I wanted to write a cheap to short film script just because I know my expensive script will never get made unless I win the lottery. Few directors have €10k to make a short film for. Also, I needed a script that could work for college or high school students with access to a school. I have read it a few times over and with each read I change dialogue in big ways. I have never changed so much with each read, but I want to make it feel more natural and real. I delete great dialogue lines and replace them and then do that again and again. There is a ton of theme here, but I decided to cover it a bit up. It makes the characters more natural, but also removes a bit of the hand holding I had in prior versions. Locations: University hallways, dorm room, lake. Actors: 4 main actors. 1 student woman, 2 student males, 1 janitor.