No Trespassing

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A fancy man in a tailored suit endures a night of terror when he pays an unwelcome visit to a wary homeowner.
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"Effing Bankers"

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A beautiful tailored suit, a luxury car, and designer threads.

An overgrown lawn, a rusty barbecue, and a back door with a “foreclosure” sign on it.

The first set of items, to many, symbolize success in American society. The other, humiliation and failure.

Well, in No Trespassing, the humiliator has become the humiliated. Lips parched, eyes red, and his foot caught in an unbreakable bear trap, our sharply dressed banker cannot escape the green hell he helped to create.

Try as he might, his attempts to break free produce only screams. Screams that only he hears.

Until the hum of a car engine breaks the silence. But not a hum our trapped friend would be familiar with.

It’s the hum of a beat-up SUV.

And the driver inside’s almost as beat-up as his former home. A man with nothing more to lose.

Yet everything to gain. Because a small piece of paper his captive carries contains some life-changing words on it.

Words that may tragically never get seen.

What life-changing words were on the banker’s piece of paper? What does his captor intend to do?

Let’s just say that this is a short that’s thought-provoking, hard-hitting, and terribly haunting. Without much dialogue, this short visually showcases the disillusionment and desperation many in America still face today.

Any director who wants to tackle serious issues in an original way should try tackling this difficult short. The potential rewards for getting it right could be enormous.

Review by Hamish Porter

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